What ya all think of iprovements, and feedback on the story


Hello everybody, I wanted to know what ya all think of the new sprites, bgs, small animations and the story so far.

Hope ya all are liking the progress I plan on exploring the other kingdoms and the plot but first I need to finish introducing the wolf kingdom but one or two more builds and the wolf kingdom might be at least 85% explored.

Have a good and blessed friday everyone <3.

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i think a dylus kissing scene would help a lot and a benignus kissing scene and a torin kissing scene and the king too and 

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> iprovements

Well, grammar still shit, that’s for certain 

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Hiya, 1st thank you for reading the vn, but there's no need to use such language, I accepte all criticism, for grammar yes I'm I still need to learmln more english so it can be corrected, when I said improvements I also was reffering to the new sprites, bgs and adding some small to the vn and what people are thinking of the story so far :)

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Thank ya, yeah i undestand what ya mean, could ya give me some examples to make it easier to know what was wrong?

Dude, people in the comment section to this game are volunteering to help you with grammar, yet you *still* decided to ignore them all and continue writing your visual novel with your subpar knowledge of English! Do you seriously expect me not to get angry at that fact?

I know and has I also said in the comments I have an american friend helping me with the grammar problems could ya also give me some examples to make it easier to know what was wrong and wich sentences ya don't understand so I can change so it's more easy to read and understand